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The plot is intriguing and unique, we always want to read more to know what happens, we can feel the tension and happiness, and there is a good balance between good and bad moments.
So sir, I applaud you on this magnificent story you have written, I believe, from the bottom of your heart. I really loved reading this, so, thank you. <3
Once again, thank you so much.
In addition, each experience and obstacle that Spike ultimately overcame made the adventure so much more worthwhile, adding even more for me to learn as I continued through this amazing story. Also, the dialogue was funny. My personal favorite was Spike before he ran the obstacle course: "Your faith in me is much appreciated and completely misplaced!"
Thank you so much for opening me up to so many new ideas, philosophies, and that sometimes, greed and jealousy aren't always a bad thing. Especially when it means protecting and defending those dear to you, when given the opportunity. Don't stop writing, either! I'd probably explode twice if I saw you starting another fanfic (Sorry, had to steal that one. You can have it back whenever you want. )
I don't know what else to do to show my appreciation for this fanfic, so I'll just throw these in.
I love how you found the loophole to a dragon's stereotypical instincts! I'm personally going back to find that chapter(wouldn't mind a little help *winkwinknudgenudge*). Honestly, this is the best MLPFiM Fanfic- EVER!~
'tis be such a heartwarming / heart-wrenching tale, and I could empathize with dear Spike alllll the way through his journey.
I smiled at Spike's first attempts to get accustomed to his new body,
I facehoof'd when the leader of "Parents for a Peacefull Equestria" first showed up on the market place,
I was worried about the duel challenge,
Appalled by the medieval tradition of said duel in stark contrast modern Equestria,
Saddened when I learned of Spike's egg's origins,
Shocked by the harpoon being fired,
Touched by Huffy's and Trixie's tale of hardships and overcoming them,
Relieved to see the anti-dragon protesters finally listening to reason in the end,
And all the way happy to see the support that everypony gave him.
This is, easily, on the same level as "Past Sins", if not better.
(I'd have to read both again back-to-back for a definite judgement )
I've seen several comics / artist-speculations about how, when Spike grows older, he'd have to leave.
But I for one much certainly prefer this alternative.
Only minor "critique" I might have was that somehow, the fightscene seemed to fall short after the buildup throughout the entire story.
Might have worked better with a cliffhanger ending, and the fight being continued in the following chapter. Although then again, that might've turned into a DBZ-type of fight (those always span across several episodes )
I'm also looking forward to the corresponding segment of "Sweety Bell Chronicles" (whenever it's updated next anyhoof ), as I'd certainly love to see this universe revisited!
The whole inspiration for the story came from seeing a few of those artist renditions you mention, and wondering "where's the in-between steps? What happens if he stays and doesn't leave?" I couldn't find anything to answer that, so I wrote it!
Ah, eep. Yeah, resolution of conflict is always tricky. That fight scene was a beast to write, and a beast to lead to. I sort of feel that it's the natural climax, and that the riot scene suffers in comparison, which is a shame and in something I need to work on in future.
All in all, thank you so much for reading and reviewing, and I'm completely chuffed that you enjoyed it! Thank you so much!
I usually leave some criticism, but it's clearly not needed here, this feels rather professional.
Will be reading more at a my own lazy pace
Oh also, if you have some free time, could you give me some criticism on my own writing? Would help a lot getting feedback from someone with such a great style.
If it's all the same to you, of course, don't want to be a bother ^^